Feedback on the blurb for “The Return of Prince Malock” wanted

Hey guys.

Next month will be the official release of The Return of Prince Malock, the sequel to June’s The Mad Voyage of Prince Malock and Book Two in the Prince Malock World series of novels.

I’ve been working on the blurb for the novel, but it’s been a kind of frustrating process, largely because I’m not sure how interesting it is. Just to be sure, I am going to post it here for my readers so they can tell me if it sounds good or not.

Here it is:

After the disastrous voyage to the once-mythical island of World’s End, Prince Tojas Malock is no longer sure what he believes in anymore. All he wants is time to think about what he and his crew have experienced and to see his home once more.

But upon returning to Carnag, Malock’s parents — King Halock and Queen Markinia, the rulers of Carnag — reveal that they have already arranged a marriage between him and Princess Raya Kabadi, the Princess of Shika, to take place exactly one month later. This leads into a series of events that Malock couldn’t have possibly foreseen or prepared for, including the rise of a new social movement dedicated to ending worship of all of the northern gods.

In this riveting sequel to “The Mad Voyage of Prince Malock,” author Timothy L. Cerepaka delves deeper into the world of Martir, a world where the gods are divided and the mortals must do whatever it takes to survive.

Does this sound interesting? If you saw this on an ebook store or on the back cover of a print book, would you be enticed to buy the book (or at least read the first few pages just to see if it’s as interesting as this makes it out to be)? If not, why not?

I would really appreciate as much feedback on this as I can get. A novel’s blurb is very important in helping it sell, so if it’s uninteresting or badly written or whatever, I would like to know so I can rewrite it and make it better, if necessary. Specific comments would be more helpful than vague ones, though I’ll take what I can get.

And if you would like to be the first to know of this novel’s release, you can subscribe to my newsletter here.

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